Thursday, January 5, 2012

Five Sentence Fiction

This Five Sentence Fiction has been moved.
You can now find it at http://rjropsen.com/hunger/

Sincerely,
R.J. Ropsen

15 comments:

  1. I like the imagery in the second sentence, powerful. The last line left me wanting to know more; how he would rise above and survive. Nice job.

    Thanks so much for joining in on Five Sentence Fiction!!

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  2. The town was
    as desolate as his stomach that rumbled from hunger. If he didn't find
    food or water soon he would surely die. <---That was amazing!!!

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  3. @Lillie McFerrin Thanks I really enjoyed participating in Five Sentence Fiction!

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  4. @ BragonDorn I enjoyed that sentence too! Thanks for the positive feedback! :)

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  5. "The others hadn't thought much of him..." I kept rolling that sentence over in my head, it says a lot about motivation in just a few words. Nice!

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  6. I really like how you descibe the town with the mention of his hunger. Great use of imagery there!

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  7. @ Jo-Anne Thanks for the positive feedback. I am glad you enjoyed it.

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  8. @ Stephanie Thanks! It seemed like a good way to tie in the word hunger.

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  9. That was a powerful piece, and one of those pieces that leaves me begging for more...Maybe someday this could work into a story of its own.

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  10. @ Claire Thanks. Maybe, my imagination could run wild on that one!

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  11. Makes me want to know more about the story..interesting twists.

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  12. you've created a real sense of despair and desolation, but with a tiny splash of hope. Will he survive? Good one!
    Kate

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  13. @ spring days, new growth I am glad you enjoyed my short story. I really hope he survives.

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